Rough cut 1 with feed back

Teachers feed back

• Emu Productions logo is nice - can you add some form of sound to it?

• Tower Productions logo could be a little more clear - or is this your actual one? Again, could sound be added?

• Nice fade into the film opening

• Can you make the transitions between cuts of Ben walking toward the camera a little smoother?

• When Ben is on the phone/the phone scene the camera can be wobbly and sometimes the focus is lost (after the phone is dropped) - can this be rectified?

• Good camera movement when Ben walk toward the camera with gun in hand.

• Camera a little wobbly on antagonist and phone call

• Lovely shots and camera movement as Ben nears the antagonist

• Excellent focus pull when Ben has gun to antagonists head

• Brilliant fight sequence - well done with the foley sound effects - it feels very realistic!

• Wobbly camera coming from the head up to Ben again after he has been hit

• How will it end? Needs to be a little more professional.

Olivia's Feed back

• In the phone call scene, the camera movement is wobbly

• Pull focus = beautiful!

• Fight sequence is extremely realistic and the foley effects are literally the best thing I've ever experienced.

• As Ben stands up following the fight scene, the camera is very wobbly

• Lovely tracking shot

• Love the scene of Ben walking through the field, lovely way of showing passing in time

• Very professional logos at the beginning

Sophie Hughes-Narborough's Feedback

• Needs some sort of soundtrack to go with Ben walking to engage audience

• When Ben is holding the gun to the other guys head, the camera is wobbly

• Add sound for Emu Productions logo

• As Ben is walking away from the fight scene the camera is wobbly

• Focus issue after Ben drops the phone and walks away

Luke's Feed Back

• Tower Production logo stay's on screen too long.

• Phone call scene has a lot of extra movement from camera man.

• Silencer scene again has got a lot of extra movement from camera man, also ben isn't centred within the shot.

• Dom phone call scene I think could be made more fluent, as there is a lot of delay between caller and recipient.

• With Ben's second approach scene, Ben mainly is at the right of the shot with a lot of distance between him and the left of the shot.

 Tom and Michael